The Ripple Effect of a Broken Pencil: College Application Essay

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This college application essay is built on one image: a pencil that snapped on a middle-school carpet in eighth grade, the year the applicant’s parents divorced. Each later episode repeats that break on a larger scale: a short story about a cracked compass published in a local literary magazine, a Saturday tutoring program for more than 30 students, and a summer of failed experiments with biodegradable materials that ended in first place at a state science fair. The essay closes by returning to the pencil and naming its lesson: “brokenness often precedes growth.”

A minuscule thing happened: a pencil cracked into pieces on the dirty, beige carpet of my middle school in eighth grade. When I picked it up and noted the jagged fracture about halfway down the length of the pencil, it was as if I was living in that moment. My parents had just divorced, leaving my family fractured. I was too young to understand what that meant at the time but I would gradually understand it as I grew up. At 13, I couldn’t fix the break but I held on to the pencil like my life depended on it. I wanted it to mean something. I wanted it to tell my story that even broken things could still be used as writing tools.

That year, I joined the creative writing club of my school, writing poetry and short stories on the Spinner. Writing gave me a voice that I felt I had lost by the time a lot of change occurred in my life. I wrote a story about a girl who finds herself sailing through a stormy sea with a cracked compass as her only map. I submitted it and it was published in a local literary magazine. It had been a long time since I had any power over what could be said about me. Seeing my words in print was therefore enabling and empowering and I knew that creativity was not just a resource but also a survival strategy. Throughout my time in high school, this would become a recurring theme. Small actions would have a broader impact. During my sophomore year, I noticed a troubling trend in my community: students struggling with science and mathematics were having trouble finding affordable tutors. As a result, I founded Bright Futures Tutoring, a service meant to help people rewrite their stories through tutoring. The program was held in a borrowed classroom on a Saturday schedule. We had over 30 students and many volunteers tutoring them. At the end of her first semester, one student, Mia, told me she went from failing algebra to a B. I remembered why I started this to begin with, to ensure that students like her were never stuck, as I once was.

I focused everything on helping others, and my curiosity about the natural world bloomed. I spent weeks one summer experimenting with biodegradable materials hoping to come up with some kind of plastic alternative I could use on a day-to-day basis. Each one of my failures got me thinking more and more creatively. When I finally created my work to present at the state science fair, I won first place. It wasn't about a trophy for the project, it was that perseverance it took to put me there.

For better or worse, I learned a little from all of this breakage, and the one thing that I’ve learned is that brokenness often precedes growth. A fractured pencil. A struggling student. A failed experiment. There were learned lessons in these moments, moments where I was taught to see potential within someone, where others might see limitations. I am fascinated by your college – that it will serve as a continuation of my story with my passions of education, environmental sustainability and creative problem solving being put into use. I hope not just to learn but also to create ripples of change, proving that even small actions, like picking up a pencil, can inspire something much bigger.

Editorial addition · not part of the original essayOne Broken Pencil, Four RipplesThe essay starts from one small object and widens around it, like rings on water: each later episode is a bigger version of the same break, tied back to the pencil by a line of the essay’s own.
  1. Eighth grade, age 13

    A broken pencil

    A pencil snaps on a middle-school carpet in the year the writer’s parents divorce, and the writer keeps it.

    “even broken things could still be used as writing tools”

  2. That year

    A story in print

    In the creative writing club, a story about a girl crossing a stormy sea with a cracked compass is published in a local literary magazine.

    “creativity was not just a resource but also a survival strategy”

  3. Sophomore year

    Bright Futures Tutoring

    Saturday science and math tutoring in a borrowed classroom for more than 30 students; one of them, Mia, goes from failing algebra to a B.

    “to ensure that students like her were never stuck, as I once was”

  4. One summer

    Failed experiments

    Weeks of testing biodegradable materials as a plastic alternative end in first place at the state science fair.

    “it was that perseverance it took to put me there”

  5. College

    The next ripple

    The close lists the breaks again and carries the lesson into the writer’s plans: education, environmental sustainability and creative problem solving.

    “brokenness often precedes growth”

Diagram by Writers Per Hour, summarising the essay above; the quoted lines are the essay’s own.

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